Throughout all of my essays I’ve had several revisions that needed to be made prior to turning it in to my professor. In essay two my peers left several comments some include, “add second source quotes to some of your paragraphs (to make Barclay-style paragraph)” or “make sure each body paragraph does work to help prove or support your thesis” and I realised they were about the way my piece was written, essentially each paragraph could have been its own essay idea because the ideas within my paragraphs didn’t go back to the main topic/claim, so in agreement I decided to cut most of my quote’s in half and put my paragraphs into a barclays formula that will help me push the reader towards my main thesis which was “Money spent towards a Liberal Arts education is never a waste and will benefit you in every sense”. Not all revisions helped with developing my essay as a whole for example “i’m not 100% sure if this is correct formatting, i think it would just be (Scheuer 5) but im not sure on this”, I’ll admit some were just minor mistakes in grammar made because I was rushing to ensure all the information I wanted was put into writing. However, I believe any feedback is good feedback because it will only help me improve my writing. Other feedback from my peers was about everything being in agreement, no “naysayers” which made it difficult to read because of the biased way the writing seemed. As I looked into possible naysayers, I was able to demonstrate my ability to understand the authors within the articles better, and after looking at possible naysayers within their pieces it helped me develop a “naysayer paragraph” that I feel brought my piece together.